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Script consultancy · Karel Segers

Your script, diagnosed.

Send your work, and Karel tells you what it needs. By email, within two working days.

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You already know something is wrong.

  • Readers say they like it; and pass anyway.
  • The second act is thirty pages of ... waiting.
  • You cannot say what it is about, let alone in one sentence.
  • Draft seven feels further from a sale than draft three.

Selected credits

Films Karel consulted on.

Karel Segers
Story analyst · The Story Department

Twenty years reading for festivals, funds and producers.

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Karel Segers
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Kōkā
2025 · Drama
Written byKath Akuhata-Brown
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The Legend of Baron To'a
2020 · Action, Comedy
Written byJohn Argall
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Danger Close: The Battle of Long Tan
2019 · War, Drama
Written byJames Nicholas, Karel Segers, Jack Brislee, and Paul Sullivan
The Furies poster
The Furies
2019 · Horror, Thriller
Written byTony D'Aquino
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Bad Cat
2016 · Animation, Comedy
Written byLevent Kazak
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Wadjda
2012 · Drama
Written byHaifaa al-Mansour

“He just might be the most underrated story analyst in the world today. … my first feature film would never have been made.”

Richard Barcaricchio, Veritas Entertainment; Rippy (2024) · Intensive Care

“Very good notes, the detail and specifics are always appreciated. … the items that pinpoint the inciting incident and unclear goals really will assist in me cracking the script into cohesive punchy story.”

John Argall, The Legend of Baron To'a (2020) · Devcon 3

“What sets you apart is that you answer the real question (which almost everyone else completely avoids because it's too hard).”

John Head, Represented by Range Media Partners · Script Notes

Send your script

Send it, and find out what it needs.

Upload the script, or a logline and a one-page synopsis if that is where you are. Karel reads enough to tell you what it needs and which service fits, and replies by email within two working days.

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Karel Segers Your reader is Karel. Your notes don't come from a pool of readers, interns, or AI.

    Where do you think it hurts?

    Optional, and the most useful two minutes you can spend. Tell Karel what you already suspect, and the report will start there.

    Proof of what you sent

    Every upload is entered in a register with the time it arrived and a digital fingerprint of each file, and you are emailed a receipt with both. The fingerprint matches your exact file and nothing else, so if anyone ever claims your story as theirs, the receipt shows what you sent and when. While this is not a copyright registration, the record of submission may help you establish a timeline in a copyright ownership dispute.

    Say why you are sending it, attach at least one file, and add your email.

    A panel headed “What to do first — before anything else”, instructing the writer to rewrite the synopsis before touching the script.

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    Page 2 — the one job that comes before the rest

    The first thing in the document is the single job that comes before everything else. Nothing further in the report matters until it is done.