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Services

Your script, diagnosed.

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7 services
One reader — K. Segers
All fees in US$

Service You send · You get · Turnaround Price in US$

Logline Consultation

Half an hour on your logline with Karel Segers, founder of Logline It, until the sentence does its job.

One logline · 30-minute Zoom · 7 days

One logline 30-minute Zoom 7 days

Pitch Deck Notes

A read of the document you send before the script exists, and an honest answer on whether it sells the project.

20 pages

Pitch deck or lookbook, up to 20 pages · Written report · 14 days

Pitch deck or lookbook, up to 20 pages Written report 14 days

Story Notes

Feedback on your concept, point of view, character and structure, from a synopsis rather than a full draft.

Synopsis to 5 pages or 2,000 words

Synopsis, 2 to 5 pages · Written report · 21 days

Synopsis, 2 to 5 pages Written report 21 days

Script Notes

Most booked

A full read of your feature screenplay and a written report on what works, what does not, and what to fix first.

Feature screenplay to 110 pages

Feature screenplay · A written report of four pages or more, a scorecard, and a condensed scene map · 21 days

Feature screenplay A written report of four pages or more, a scorecard, and a condensed scene map 21 days

Second Opinion

Your first cut is not working and you cannot see why. I watch it and tell you.

Cut to 120 minutes

A link to your cut · Written notes + a call · 14 days

A link to your cut Written notes + a call 14 days

Script Notes, two drafts

Advice via Zoom on story and style over three stages: a draft, a step outline, and a next draft. Written reports back it all up.

A feature screenplay to 110 pages

A feature screenplay to 110 pages

Intensive Care

Notes across three drafts over 12 weeks, with calls between each. For a script going out to market.

Your feature screenplay, then each rewrite as it lands · Three written reports across three drafts, with a call between each · 12 weeks, three rounds

Your feature screenplay, then each rewrite as it lands Three written reports across three drafts, with a call between each 12 weeks, three rounds

Specialist

Series Pilot

A read of your pilot script or your series bible, with notes on whether the show holds up past episode one.

Pilot script or series bible · Written report + scorecard · 21 days

Pilot script or series bible Written report + scorecard 21 days

Short Film Notes

A read of your short script and a written report on concept, structure, dialogue and scene design.

20 pages

Short script, up to 20 pages · Written report + scorecard · 21 days

Short script, up to 20 pages Written report + scorecard 21 days
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DEVCON 3

Three days on site, in the room with your team, solving the problems before the deadline hits.

from US$6,500 plus travel Next start October 3, 2026 Check availability